linnhe ([personal profile] linnhe) wrote in [personal profile] curledupkitten 2013-07-31 01:18 am (UTC)

"Finance, huh?" She's chewing gum loudly, with her mouth open, and Jongin leans on the desk so he can look into the notebook she has open.
i know it's backwards to like a char that's from another band in an exo fic but the way you wrote her is so perfect T-T

Sehun shrugs. "I don't know anyone's names," he says. "Too much effort. I can barely remember yours."
bwahahaha, sehun you little cunt ♥

"Hi," Jongin croaks, which is marginally better than 'wow you are all my fantasies come to life and I wish we were both naked right now'.
he is so so loveable in this :( use your words jongin

He opens up a planner (who still uses a planner?) to reveal a mass of cramped black text in a neat hand.
noooooo he is already completely amazing, with his planner and how normal he is

"You are stupid, though," says Chanyeol, holding two hats in his hands and weighing the options.
CHANYEOL YOU'RE NOT HELPING ;-;

Today Joonmyun is wearing a cream sweater with red zigzag lines across the chest and tiny blue diamonds. Not only is it repulsive, it is also summer and thus completely the wrong season for sweaters.
i bet he'd look so cute in a sweater like that. man this joonmyun is making me like actual joonmyun like a hundred times more.

When they get to the café, Joonmyun insists on sitting on a small couch instead of at a table. "We're just doing theory today," he says, rubbing his elbow against Jongin's side as Jongin tries not to melt into a puddle of lust and despair, "so we don't really need a table." Joonmyun is small and dainty. He fits nicely against Jongin. This is not good.
the lust and despair made me laugh :D so dramatic

"Although I'm thinking Jongin's imagination ran out of gas before it got to the haircut."
bwahaha

"There's nothing wrong with his hair," Jongin snaps, before he remembers that 1. that is an incriminating thing to say, and 2. literally everything is wrong with Joonmyun's hair.
jongin hating the shit out of joonmyun's hair is my entire life right now

"You combed your hair," Chanyeol says. "And you're not wearing those terrible droopy crotch sweatpants." He sniffs.

"They're dirty," Jongin says.

"They're always dirty. That's never stopped you before." Chanyeol's baseball cap has slid sideways. He looks really dumb. "Are you studying off campus, or something? You usually only bother to put on real clothes when you think strangers are going to judge you."

"No, just his room." Jongin frowns and presses tugs down on his shirt.

"His room?" Chanyeol is suddenly much more invested in the conversation, spinning around in his swivel chair. "Why his room?"

"He said he was busy today, and if I wouldn't mind just coming to his room to study."

"Because you going to his room will make him less busy?" Chanyeol narrows his round eyes gleefully. He looks like a dinosaur. "Dude, he just wants you to go over to his room."

"No he doesn't," Jongin says. "Don't be ridiculous."

"Okay," Chanyeol says. "Well, you'd better bunny-hop on over there because it's almost three o'clock." He makes a bunny motion with his fingers and Jongin does not understand how Chanyeol manages to be both a million centimeters tall and yet five years old at the same time.

I KNOW QUOTES SHOULDNT BE THIS LONG BUT THIS ENTIRE EXCHANGE IS PERFECT :( chanyeol is so hilariously mean but he speaks the truth and omfg @ a million centimeters tall and bunny-hop

"I don't get it," Zitao says. "Is that sarcasm? My Korean isn't at sarcasm levels."
don't lie tao it's bad for your skin

to be fair, though, there was this one time when jongin was in his second year of middle school. his childhood friend, taemin, had dared him to shave his pubes and his mother had walked in on him in the middle of sliding a razor to the left of his surprisingly hard dick. the only reason this is worse is because his mother had to love him anyway, whereas joonmyun is under no such obligation.
okay so i love, looooove these inner thoughts lines. i love their contents and the way you stylized them, they're great

"Now lift your hips," Joonmyun says, and Jongin can feel the red of embarrassment encroaching on him as what's happening finally starts to sink in. This is actually the plot of a porn movie.
HMMM HOW STRANGE?? IT MUST BE BECAUSE JOONMYUN IS TOTALLY NOT A PORN STAR. YES THAT'S WHAT THAT MEANS.

This is not actually happening. Jongin is going to wake up any second now with his hand down his pants and Chanyeol chortling on the other side of the room, and everything will be terrible.
only terrible for you bb
chanyeol snark ftw

"You can call me anything you want," Jongin whimpers, and Joonmyun nuzzles, ✫ ✫nuzzles!!!!!✫ ✫ his dick.
i nearly cried at the little 'nuzzles!!!!!!!'

"You think? Jongin, it smells like a honeymoon suite at midnight in here."

"That's because you used so much Febreeze!"

yes. that is the reason.

"You always think everything will work out," Jongin says. "I don't trust anything you say."

"You are so wound up. Go watch one of your Suho movies or something. I'm going to Baekhyun's room to watch movies with him and Yifan." Chanyeol is still wearing his jeans. Jongin hadn't noticed. "I'll probably stay over, so maybe you can have a creepy little marathon."

Chanyeol's not so bad as a roommate, sometimes. Jongin likes him best when he leaves.

chanyeol, actual best roommate there has ever lived
also the whole three person relationship he maybe has going is 100% doing it for me

(he's also mildly concerned about his Finance exam, and he'd forgotten to wash his face before crawling under the covers but now he is too comfortable to get up.) it's mostly the joonmyun, thing, though, and jongin thinks the image of joonmyun on his knees is going to haunt him the rest of the weekend. maybe the rest of his life.
i thought it was so cute when there were parentheses in what is essentially already a parentheses bit. he's also very human here, in that joonmyun isn't the only thing plagueing him and he's being a lazy hamster about washing his face

"I didn't put in all those extra hours for nothing," he says, eventually, like five minutes after it has ceased to be relevant. Sehun looks at him like he's a particularly dimwitted pet that he has no choice but to love despite obvious flaws.

"Did you just spend all that time trying to figure out how to respond to me without mentioning your porn star lookalike tutor's name?" Sehun asks, after a moment of deliberation. Jongin blushes.

"No," he says. "Don't be stupid." This is an obvious lie. Jongin may have to downgrade himself from goldfish. Amoeba, maybe. Only he doesn't know what sound an amoeba makes. Do amoebas make sounds?

"Wow, okay," Sehun says. "This is all worse than I thought. You want him to be proud of you." Sehun's pointy snake-tongue comes out of his mouth to wet his lips.

"I'll bury you without your panties," Jongin says. "They'll never catch me."

"I'm so done with you," Jongin says, as Sehun laughs nasally. "I've been done with you since you showed up in my life."

jongin's friendship with everyone is perfect
especially since it appears he legitimately hates them haha


"Oh, hello, Professor Lee," Jongin says, and both he and Sehun bow, although Sehun is a rude little shit and half-asses it.
sehun is terrible i love him :(

"You know what?" Jongin says. "I suddenly have somewhere to be."
looool

"I'm going to dig that grave really deep!" Jongin shouts at Sehun as he walks away, ignoring the alarmed stares of passersby.
i can't decide which of the friendships in this story i dig the most, this is becoming a real issue??

opting instead for emails, despite the fact that joonmyun insists on smileys. they are the worst. it is like jongin is emailing a thirteen year old girl.
oh jongin, i recognize this kind of hating
you are so screwed ♥

"You confuse me."

"I think you're easily confused," says Joonmyun.

okay this has to be one of my favourite parts about joonmyun; how he's not this completely perfect, sugary-sweet guy all the time. he also has these sides to him where he's playfully snarky or like a little too anal about things and it lifts his character into greatness

"You're so hot," says Jongin with frustration. He licks angrily at the dip at the edge of Joonmyun's lowest ridge. "I don't understand. Your hair is so awful."
WHY WOULD YOU SAY THAT OUT LOUD

Joonmyun's body quivers, maybe with laughter or maybe with Jongin's breath across wet skin. Jongin is not good with words. Joonmyun might not want to sleep with a guy who insults his hair.
well it's a little late to figure that out now isn't it

dick doesn't taste like watermelon. joonmyun is right about that. it does taste like plastic, but jongin doesn't hate the flavor, especially not when joonmyun is doing his best not to fuck jongin's mouth even though jongin is sure this is not the best blowjob joonmyun has ever received, on the merits that jongin doesn't know what the hell he's doing.
jongin-ah, you do know penises aren't actually condom-flavoured
right?

"The batteries in your brain are dead," Sehun says. "Maybe they were faulty to start with."
every time sehun or chanyeol say anything i go 'okay he's my favourite'
sehun you're my favourite ;-; until chanyeol speaks

Jongin starts throwing pens from his desk at Sehun, a steady stream of them until Sehun is swearing at him.
i pictured this in my head and laughed like a shark

"Like the fact that how pretty you are can't make up for how empty your head is."

Jongin's first instinct is to say 'You think I'm pretty?' but he bites that one back just in time, which leaves him floundering for something else. When in doubt: "Shut up, Sehun."

that would have been such a good comeback though *-* COME ON JONGIN SAY THE RIGHT THINGS I KNOW YOU HAVE IT IN YOU

Maybe all that kindness makes your hair bigger.
/cackles and dies

"You flirt like a high schooler," says Joonmyun, and Jongin freezes. "Why is it so effective?" He sounds frustrated and confused.
this line slayed me, how it went from 'oh i'm totally on to you' to 'but i'm falling for it anyways?? D:' so quickly, bwahaha

"I don't—" Jongin's arch nemesis, the sentence, strikes again.
ironically, this is my favourite sentence

Jongin is going to die right here. If one has got to go, this is the way to do it. He hopes his mother won't be too embarrassed to go to his funeral.
#obligatorylove you'll be fine bb

Jongin could stay like this forever. Joonmyun has too many things in his planner to do that.
i am putting forward a motion to burn the planner

"Can I say something?" Jongin's voice sounds too loud in the quiet. The music is in a lull.

"I don't know," Joonmyun says. He's up on one elbow, drawing patterns on Jongin's hipbone. It is distracting. "Can you? You seem to struggle with it."

okay no joonmyun is my favourite

"I don't know what you could possibly be talking about," Jongin deadpans. Deadpan might be the wrong word. What Jongin actually does is mumble embarrassingly at the floor.
i've seen 'deadpanned' being used inaccurately in fic so many times, this line was a really fun twist on that

Chanyeol twists and turns until he and Yifan both fit onto the bed. Yifan looks torn between put out and pleased. Jongin doesn't get them at all. The only things they have in common are an unfortunate love of Drake's newest EP, exceptional height, and Baekhyun.
this story wasn't even about them and i fell in love with this ot3 anyways
i blame drake

Yifan's hair is pushed back from his face in a pompadour. Anyone with an actual pompadour can't make fun of anything Jongin does, so there is no harm in telling him.
but
jongin you
have a pompadour like twice in this story

"You're just watching that porn movie like it's a regular show," Chanyeol says incredulously, and Jongin turns around to look at him.

"When did you get home?" asks Jongin, still staring at the flagged sent message.

"You're not even jacking off to it. You're just watching it."

"So?"

Now, when he falls asleep, he just thinks about gross lame things like holding Joonmyun's hand. The worst part is, Joonmyun would totally hold Jongin's hand back but it wouldn't mean anything.

"You look like a slighted drama heroine right now," Chanyeol says. He's unpacking his bag, meticulously organizing his books and papers into piles on his desk. Great. Not only is Chanyeol going to remind Jongin that he's falling for Joonmyun, he's also going to responsibly do all his homework. "Baekhyun's coming over in an hour," Chanyeol says. "If you're still watching that movie, he's going to laugh at you."

Chanyeol is the worst roommate ever.

... everyone is my favourite? i could picture chanyeol's stunned expression so well and guh TT-TT he's so cute when he looks confused (ie always)

He realizes this when he finds himself painfully erect in the shower as he rinses out his conditioner, thinking about Joonmyun's shampoo and ugly hair.
you love that hair, man. admit it.

"Why don't you watch one of your two hundred videos of Suho so you can remember what his face looks like."

"I only have sixty-four, don't exaggerate," says Jongin.

yes pls let's stick to the embarrassing facts

Yifan starts petting Chanyeol's hair. Jongin is done here.
NO JONGIN STAY AND TELL ME MORE

"Y-yeah," Jongin says. It's Joonmyun all right. Joonmyun, in tight white pants and eyeliner on his eyes and a shirt that looks like a disco ball. He looks so bright in the dark club. His hair is a mess and he can't dance at all.

"Jonginnie, please," Lu Han says. "I don't even know which one of them it is but the sheer amount of uncoordinated movement is tragic."

oh wow, he really truly loves him doesn't he °-° these are some soulmate levels of hate

Chanyeol laughs. His laugh is so loud.


They're seated around a table in the back of the 'Kimbap Sarang', three rolls of tuna kimbap in front of them and one roll of beef because Yifan is a prissy bitch who won't eat fish.
D:
yifan no

"You look sexy but miserable," says a girl at the bar. It takes Jongin a moment to realize it's Krystal. "I predict you will get many numbers tonight."
;__________; krysqueen


okay so. everyone's characterization in this was absolutely wonderful, the pacing was impeccable, and wow your sense of humour ;;;;;;; i can't wait to explore and look at whatever else you've written

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